What differentiates a good marketing email from a bad one, in your mind? Perhaps it’s the imagery or the use of fonts. Maybe it’s the copy – or lack thereof.
My theory of “less copy is more money” was proven valid last week in one of my company’s sponsorship emails.
This is an example of the email for our upcoming event, SSOW. The subject line was simply (Your company’s) Involvement in Shared Services & Outsourcing Week.
This is why I thought this email was so great:
The calls-to-action are extremely apparent
The use of colored fonts against a dull background really pop aesthetically and are very professional
There are no block lines of copy – because that is really all that’s necessary!!!
It treats the reader with respect – want to see the agenda? Click there. Want to see the list of attendees? Click here. Want to Register. Click here. The imagery and words are implied, therefore we don’t need to tell them what to do, which leads me to …
The epitome of great writing, and therefore great marketing emails, is to “show” and not “tell.” What does this mean? We’re showing them how to navigate the email and more importantly, we’re showing them the value they’ll receive at the event through easily digestible tidbits.
Anddddd….. drumroll please.
How did it perform??
The marketing manager says,
“There were three things that we did differently with this email that we were a little bit worried about:
No downloadable links. Only requests that pop up to an email
We had only TWO items they would request: Spex Prospectus and Current Attendee List
A image based email with hardly any text. So almost like sending an infographic. And of course making it look fabulous and pretty :)”
All three test had very positive results:
19 actives. 7 of these we received in the first 10 minutes.
21% open rate
Compare that to the previous email (on the right) that had:
Who says that writers don’t know science? Writing is a science! If it weren’t, then anything that was ever written for marketing or advertising purposes would do its job and make you fast cash.
Know your audience.
The more you know, the better targeted and relevant your copy will be. Ask yourself:
What does their everyday life look like? Who do they work with? What websites do they read?
What are they passionate about? Hobbies?
What past products/services have they purchased and how does your offering compare? Once this is identified, however, it’s ineffective to use comparison words in the copy itself. For instance, instead of saying “Our vacuum cleaner is better than the common household brand.” You identify how it is better, ie., “Our vacuum cleaner has five times the suction as other brands.” Now you’re showing them, not just telling them.
Identify key motivators.
Great copy motivates people to feel, think or do something. One way of achieving this is by addressing them personally. I don’t mean to say that you should call them out by name – I mean that they need to trust you. They need to like you.
You can reach users by speaking directly to them – be conversational and as specific as possible. Avoid sweeping statements.
Don’t use passive voice — write in the present tense (avoid gerunds, or, the “ing”)
Short, Simple and Sincere (one way of doing this is by avoiding adjectives)
The way you position words, pictures and paragraphs in your website copy or email are important.
Indent sections & number paragraphs
Capitalize and BOLD sparingly. Does anyone underline anymore?
Include a testimonial.
It’s always better to have someone else say how great you are so that you don’t have to. A brief and convincing quote from a respected source adds credibility to your campaign.
Keep your copy clean and concise.
Cut unnecessary words and consolidate ideas.
Have someone else read it to see if they understand the message.
Avoid weasel words.
Weasel words include: may, maybe, hope
Instead, use words that emote power and prestige: will and can